"Hi Lillian:
When I sent you my Escaping Reality for your review, you sent me your Anna Mae Mystery. I was too busy to read through it then but I have had time in the last couple of days. When I realized it was not adult fiction I didn’t think I would enjoy it but I was wrong.
Although the editing work I do is for all genres for adult readers, I was very impressed with your work, The Anna Mae Mysteries: The Golden Treasure. I was caught up admirably by the spectre of the black gauntlet and its timely apparitions.
As a high school teacher (11 to 18) for thirty years I know plenty of pupils in the young teens who would be gripped by the antics of Anna Mae. Mover over Harry Potter and Shadowmancer! You might think their Britishness would hinder their appreciation of your American novel but although I had to look up Whippoorwill, kids over here adore American lifestyles, even those that flit randomly to Civil War Times!
Much of my criticism of writers focuses on their insufficient show instead of tell, but wow, Lillian, you demonstrate how it’s done! You use olfactory sense particularly well that poor Anna Mae had so many aromas spreading, creeping up and filling her poor nostrils. I loved it!
Youngsters rarely want very serious literature, nor characters that are too ridiculously comic for a whole book, but you grab the correct yet difficult balance.
Good luck with it."